Without You

[Phyre]

This isn't for the contest, but it's a poem I wrote that I thought you guys might be interested in

There once was a time,
So long ago,
Everything felt good,
So right in this home,
But you took that time,
You blew it away,
And I'm now without you,
You've gone away,
You said we could be friends,
I can't look at you, Faye.

You don't want to hurt me,
You wanted this serious,
I say that I love you,
You say you love me too,
I said that I love,
You speak so untrue.

Now I am alone,
I'm without you,
And maybe you're lonely,
You're unhappy too?
If you'd call me I'd be happy,
Write and I'll be on the moon,
But I'll break apart, my dear,
If you don't call me soon

[Phyre]

sorry, wrong button

[Nyerguds]

Hmm... is that autobiographical, or just made up stuff?

[Toxic10x]

not bad, not bad :) There's a few rythmic kinks to be worked out, but all around purty good. Seems like it could be lyrics to a song.

[Phyre]

it's autobiographical, and it used to be lyrics, but I didn't like 'em, so I completely changed them and this happened... yeah, a few kinks still