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Nire
08-12-2004, 02:16 PM
Dead to the World.

'What am I doing here?' Jay thought to himself, staring up at the dark, raining sky from a factory roof-top.

"Hey lets get going" Jay heard a man in the room below him. "We're going to be late!" said the man, dressed in overalls looking towards a suited female.

Jay peered through the skylight as they both stepped up into a truck. The overalled man went into the drivers seat, where the suited female opened the truck's back doors and closed them behind her. The truck began to reverse, under Jay. He immediatly picked his katana up ran to the balcony roof and jumped on the truck cabin roof.

Where the truck was going to, he didn't care. How much time he had, he cared. Five minutes pass since he jumped onto the roof, and he though 'This is the time'.

Jay unsheathed his katana from its casing, positioned himself above the driver, and slammed the sword through the roof into the unsuspecting driver's head. Killing him instantly. The truck swerved, left, then right, then left again and off the road, Jay lept from the truck landing with a thud on the road still clutching his katana. He watched the truck bump along the grass until tipping on its left due to uneven ground.

Two minutes pass, Jay, still watching the truck notices movement at the doors now verticle with the ground. 'Crack, crack, crack' three loud gunshots from inside the truck rupture the back door lock on the truck. The suited lady steps out of the truck, shaken and bleeding from her forehead, she shuffled over to the front of the truck, took a look at the driver, raised her gun, and shot the driver. She mumbled something that Jay could not hear, so he decided it was her time. He slowly moved for some cover while unsheathing his katana. It must have reflected the moonlight as it caught the womans attention. She immediatly put her back up to the downed truck and peered around the corner to see what it was, an old road, infront of it, a bush, with something moving behind it, she raised her gun, still with her back around the corner, and pulled the trigger. Tink. The bullet ricochet'd off the blade, and into the wet grass. She shot two more bullets into the bush, both wizzed past and missed Jay.

She stopped. Jay noticed her reloading her gun, he jumped through the bushes and ran at her, sword drawn, it was only a matter of seconds until he was within feet of his target. But she was quicker then he had realised, she raised her six-shooter, stopping him in his tracks. Two feet away. Jay peered down the barrel of a small pistol. She smiled, and began to pull the trigger....

((my first story attempt since school, it may be continued depending on the responce, thanks :) ))

KrasnyOktyabr
08-12-2004, 02:46 PM
I'm not a critic, but it seems peachy enough. :p

wargrudge
08-12-2004, 02:47 PM
Thats KO's way of saying it's good :p

And I agree with him, very nice.

Bean
08-12-2004, 09:31 PM
Pretty good in my opinion as well, sounds to me like everyones peachy with it too.

Nire
08-13-2004, 01:42 AM
i originally had an idea to do that part, then sort of go back to where he started but yeah you know eheh J_t

n00bie51
08-13-2004, 11:32 AM
That's very cool!